The End of IB

The school year is almost finally over, and all seniors are jumping with joy.  We are all ready to move on from high school and begin our lives in college.  High School - It was a journey!  Freshmen year feels like forever ago, but senior year feels like it started yesterday.  The last year has come and gone so fast that it seems unreal to me.  Freshmen year was a breeze, but it has just gotten harder and harder leading up to now.  Through a bunch of hard work and dedication, I have finally made it to graduation.

I remember being a junior marshall last year, and watching the seniors walk down to receive their diplomas.  I couldn't wait to become one of them myself.  Now I am, and it makes me so happy.  The IB program has been super difficult, so knowing that it is almost over delights me but also saddens

me.  I was nervous when the program started junior year, because I knew a lot of work, papers, and late nights were about to arrive.  Even though people told me how much work there was, it's hard to believe until it actually happens and hits you flat in the face.  Despite that, I think the program has really paid off for me.  I think it was worth it because it was an amazing opportunity that not everyone takes.  I was able to learn a lot of things I probably wouldn't have learned about otherwise.  Especially with film and TOK, because I wouldn't have been able to take those classes anywhere else.  I was able to have teachers that were all understanding and wonderful.  I was able to become a part of something bigger.  I think one of my favorite things about being a part of IB was being in classes where everyone wanted to learn and succeed as well.  It felt so different going to my two non-IB classes, because there is a completely different vibe within them, so I have learned to appreciate that. I think the program has also taught me to grab at any other opportunities that come my way.  I've learned that it's great to take chances, even if I am unsure about them at first.  They may not feel like it at the time, but they will be worth it in the future when I can look back and say, "Look what I have accomplished."

At the beginning of senior year, I was also nervous about college.  Everyone kept asking me where I wanted to go, what I wanted to do.  I felt pressured to know right then and there, even though I still
had plenty of time to decide.  As the year went on though, the nervousness began to drift away and excitement took its place.  After multiple essays along with college visits and tours, I finally made my decision of which one I wanted to attend in the fall.   Once that decision was made, I felt a huge weight lift off my shoulders.  I was just so excited to start anew in a completely different place, and meet  bunch of new people.  It's an opportunity to introduce myself differently.  I am still nervous about picking a major, because I honestly have no idea what I want do, but I am not as nervous as I was before.  When it's the right time, I'll know what I want and what I'm interested in.  The only thing now I'm worried about is being away from my family.  I will miss my parents, my brother that is heading to a different college than myself, and my two sisters who are my two best friends.  I know it will be weird being away from them for so long, but it will also be very fun living in a completely different area with new friends.  Hopefully, I can get involved in a lot of things that I am interested in at college, and that it will feel like my new home.  

Looking back, high school has been a journey where I have learned who my true friends are, and I have learned more about my true self.  Looking forward, I hope to find my interests, and pursue them so I can have a career that I love and enjoy.  

A Glimpse through Whitman's Notebooks

When I first looked through Walt Whitman's notebook, it just looked like a bunch of scribbles and ideas scattered across the pages.  I wasn't sure how well I would be able to read and understand it.  There were still a few words that I couldn't make out, but when I really tried to, I could actually read most of it.  I don't know how much I understood from reading it, though.  Despite that, I could grasp the main ideas of what Whitman was writing about.  I could read the beginning where he wrote that it was a dialogue with Abraham Lincoln.  Also, I could tell his writing was very deep and thought-provoking, like how he brings up virtue and philosophy.  In addition, he talks a lot of about the sea and ships.  I also noticed he uses a lot of question marks within the pages, and his syntax is really interesting.  Furthermore, the images are fascinating.  They are of a man, and in two of the drawings, I think the addition of the tall hat was a unique touch.  I could see how the first drawing was a realistic one, but then it became less realistic and more like a cartoon as the drawings continued.  The last image stands out too, because it appears to be somewhat like a skeleton with a sword through it's chest.  

Even though I haven't read his poems yet, I think these journals reveal some unique aspects of Whitman's writing and his inner thoughts.  I think the images are significant to him and how he views the world.  Also,  his deep, fascinating writing within these journals are significant to the thoughts he expresses in his poems.  I think the way he uses imagery is really cool along with his strong use of diction.  I also think the way he crosses some things out and writes in questions reveal his inner thoughts.  It's like he questions the universe, his nation and is searching for information or perhaps a solution.  He also mentions the queens of Spain and England and uses the Spanish word for liberty, which may reveal his interest in the rest of the world.  I got the sense that he was very intelligent and insightful by the way he wrote.

As I read about what Whitman's notebook actually says and why, I could understand more about his thoughts and beliefs.  I got a better sense at how much Whitman looked up to Lincoln in his time, and viewed him as a hero.  I also was then able to understand what he was saying about religion, and how they reflect his thoughts on the Civil War and the divide in the country.  Continuing on, I thought the words he added or crossed out were even more significant than I originally thought, because they are able to show his original thoughts and then how they develop and change to create new meanings.  For example, his insertion of the word 'perhaps' in front of "I shall see the crash" alters the phrase so people interpret it differently.  I was also better able to understand his views of the nation with reference to the calm sea, which switches to the rough waters and "clouds of death."  

Furthermore, I learned about some of the historical events going on that show in his writing, like how the publishers went bankrupt.  The harsh times that he went through during that time are reflected in these writings.  He was able to foreshadow events in the nation, and understand the importance of the events which would happen, because they would deeply affect the future.  For instance, there is a lot of weight behind the words, "Ship of the hope of the world, ship of promise."  The images also made more sense than before.  The man portrayed is Walt Whitman himself, and I liked how the images are described as becoming "more and more caricaturish."  Lastly, Walt mentions the last war and George Washington, which shows his interest in history and he seems to relate old events to the events going on during his own time.  

The American Dream

Through the years, the American Dream has constantly been a presence for many people.  America has always been a country known for its freedom and opportunities.  Many people even travel to this country for the chance to live a better life, and have everything they ever wanted.  Although the American Dream may have changed from its original idea, I would say everyone still has some sort of American Dream they hold on to.  It may not be exactly the same for every single person, but I think they all have something in common.  I would

describe the American Dream as the hope for prosperity and success.  It is the hope of growing up, receiving an education, having an enjoyable job, and becoming wealthy.  People may desire different careers, but the desire for wealth and success remain the same.  My own American Dream consists of graduating from high school, furthering my education in college, getting a job I really like, falling in love, having a family, and having plenty of money for everything I need and want.  Along with that, I would still want time for my hobbies, like reading, watching lots of television and movies, and traveling the world.  

Although mine might differ from others, I think the American Dream has a lot to do with wealth.  Wealth is desirable, because it can take care of so many worries and problems that one may encounter throughout life.  A person would always be able to provide themselves with necessities, like food, shelter, and clothing. When I think of wealth, I think of being rich, and having a lot of valuable possessions and money.  It's being able to have a stable life.  

Americans associate the upper class with being very wealthy.  There is an admiration for the wealthy, and everybody desires to be a part of that upper class.  They have more privileges and opportunities than the lower class, and seem to have it all.  Americans view wealth as being successful.  In some ways, money equals success.  On the other hand, there is poverty.  There are lots of people in the country who are unemployed and are suffering from the lack of money.  The government attempts to help the poor in any way that they can, but no matter what there will still be those who are less fortunate than others.  Despite that, I do think rising in society is a part of the American Dream.  The country promotes someone who works hard to get to where they want to be.  By working hard, a person can be successful in reaching their achievements and becoming wealthy.  

In my opinion though, it may not be that easy.  There are numerous obstacles that can stand in the way of that ultimate goal no matter how hard one works.  Perseverance is key.  Some people may simply have it easier than others, like those born into a rich family.  I think it is important for everyone to continue to work hard for what they want in life, and not to back down just because it doesn't come easily.  I believe in equality and community, so I think it's important for the wealthier to also give back to the community and help the less fortunate also receive what they desire in life.  Although Americans look up to the wealthy, I don't necessarily think that just being wealthy makes someone better than everyone else.  Money doesn't automatically make someone a better person.  I think it's great to have a lot of money, but what a person does with all that money is what is truly important.   

The Effect of Different Translations

First impressions are always very important, especially in books.  The first line of a story sets the mood and tone for the rest of the novel.  The first line has to be interesting enough to make the reader want to read the rest of the story.  The way the line is structured is very significant, like when it is translated in The Stranger and Metamorphosis.  The different translations of the first line in Metamorphosis impact how the reader understands the meaning of the sentence.

1: As Gregor Samsa awoke one morning from uneasy dreams he found himself transformed in his bed into a gigantic insect.

       Name at the beginning

            Use of the word insect, uneasy, and gigantic

             Periodic structure

2: Gregory Samsa woke from uneasy dreams one morning to find himself changed into a giant bug.

          Name at the beginning

          Use of the words bug, changed, giant

             Simple

3: When Gregor Samsa awoke from troubled dreams one morning he found he had been transformed in his bed into an enormous bug.

          Complex

          Use of the words troubled, transformed, enormous

       Periodic

4: One morning, upon awakening from agitated dreams, Gregor Samsa found himself, in his bed, transformed into a monstrous vermin.

      Many commas

      Use of the words monstrous vermin, agitated, and transformed

      Complex

      In these four different translations, the word choice, syntax, punctuation, and imagery all affect the meaning of the sentence.  They’re all structured just a bit differently, but the small changes affect how the reader perceives the action occurring to Gregor.  The first translation places his name at the beginning, and then follows with what happens to him establishing him as the main focus of the story.  Also in this translation, the word insect seems more sophisticated or intelligent.  It sounds more scientific than using the word bug, also making me think there must be some explanation for why it happened.  I also think the word uneasy is the most vague way to describe his dreams.  It’s the least intense compared to the other translations.  Also in my opinion, gigantic is larger than giant but smaller than enormous.  This translation is periodic, as it includes reasons, or facts, leading up to the actual shocking revelation at the end of the sentence.

The second translation’s syntax is similar to the first, but has different word choices.  The word bug differs from insect because to me, it makes it seem more casual, and maybe less disgusting.  The word changed is more casual than transformed.  To me, it makes it seem more of an everyday occurrence and not something strange or rare.  Compared to the other transformations, ‘giant’ makes it seem like a smaller bug.  I think this sentence is the simplest translation compared to the other ones. 

The third translation uses ‘when’ to start the sentence, so it makes it seem more like storytelling to me.  The word troubled makes the dreams seem scarier than using the word uneasy.  The word transformed seems more scientific and formal than just saying ‘changed.’  The word enormous is larger than gigantic and giant.  Like all the other translations, the beginning of the sentence include setting details that lead up to the main action at the end of the sentence, the main focus of the rest of the story.

The last translation contains the most commas, breaking the sentence apart in separate phrases.  Also, it places the guy’s name later in the sentence compared to the other sentences.  Unlike the other translations, the description is a ‘monstrous vermin’ which makes it seem much more terrifying and dangerous.  By using the word agitated, the dreams seem more intense, scary, and more nightmarish.  It’s a more intense version than uneasy.  Also, saying upon awakening instead of awoke or woke makes the sentence more complex than the other translations.  It includes many separates phases being placed together with commas adding to the complexity of the sentence. 

   

I think the most effective translation is the fourth one.  Overall, I think it is the most intense version of the sentence.  The word choice involved adds to the scary mood that is created.  From only the first line, I’m assuming that Gregor would be terrified if he woke up as a vermin instead of a human.  The fourth translation is able to portray that emotion through its word choices and syntax.  It’s not like the second translation that makes the event seem like an ordinary occurrence.  The word choices of ‘agitated,’ ‘transformed,’ and ‘monstrous vermin’ add to the intensity of what just happened to Gregor.  Also, the use of the many commas in the sentence separates the ideas presented.  They add pauses when reading the sentence, which adds suspense leading up to the revelation of him being turned into a vermin.  The beginning of the sentence sets up the scene for what is actually going on.  The reader doesn’t know until the end of the sentence that he has been turned into something inhuman. 

This exercise allowed me to think about the difficulty of reading translated texts.  A text can be translated and interpreted many different ways, which then affects the story presented to readers.  With translations, even a small change of a certain word strongly affects the meaning of the sentence.  Some translations can be more intense and complex than others.  This means that translations can differ from what the author was originally aiming for.  The reader has to be aware of this, so that they can take into account how the story might differ from the original story.  I’m not able to understand the original first line in German, so I have to rely on the translated sentences to read Metamorphosis.  Therefore, the changes within translated texts have a significant impact on how the reader interprets the sentence and the rest of the story.

Practice IOC

Knowledge and Understanding: 6 - I think I developed an understanding of the test and the extract and tried to support it with specific references within the passage.

Understanding of the use and effects of literary features: 6 - I think I was aware of some of the literary devices but could have went into further details about the effects.

Organization: 4 - I organized by each of the three points that I had to make, and within each section described how it connected to the end result stated at the beginning.

Language: 3 - I think it was mostly clear despite a few pauses or stumbles of words.

Total: 19

Analysis of a Passionate Ted Talk

Ted Talk: https://www.ted.com/talks/isabelle_allende_how_to_live_passionately_ no_matter_your_  age

This ted talk that I chose to watch and analyze was by a woman named Isabel Allende, and she argues that everyone should continue to live passionately throughout life, no matter what their age is.  She focuses on age right off the bat, by stating that she is 71, and then lists the ages of her husband, parents, and dog.  On the topic of aging, she discusses how society seems to determine that people are "old" around the age of 65.  However, humans start aging at birth and then are continuously aging until death.  Isabel mentions that it is hard aging, because no matter if she feels sexy and charming, that's not how people view her anymore on the outside.  To counter that, she says that aging is about health and attitude.  It's up to the person to choose how to feel.  Furthermore, she speaks of her fear of what comes with aging.  She discusses how she fears losing her youth and independence as she grows older, but has experienced some pros as well.  She gained freedom, spirituality, and is no longer afraid of being vulnerable.  She feels freer and lighter than ever before, and can now let go of any weaknesses or deadly sins that others exhibit at younger ages.  Ending her argument, Isabel once again emphasizes her want to live passionately and openhearted throughout all of her life.

I think her purpose for doing this ted talk was to achieve an emotional connection to everyone in the audience.  Aging is a universal concept that everyone can understand.  The way she talks about the topic makes it interesting and inspiring.  She’s hoping to communicate the importance of everyone living the lives to the fullest, even in old age.  Aging is not a valid reason to stop living the life the way one wants.  It’s a choice that one needs to make, and her emotional connection persuades viewers to take her advice and continue living passionately despite growing older.

Her talk contains some ethos due to Isabel's credibility as a novelist and memoirist.  Because of her career, she is used to writing about passionate lives.  She believes she became a writer due to her exile to America in the 1970s.  She also works with nonprofits to empower women because she believes it’s the only way to achieve social justice.  Her career is not explicitly stated during her talk, but it does explain how she is able to be comfortable with her words and knowing exactly what to say to persuade someone to her side while doing so on an emotional level.  She has spent her life writing with passion, which makes her seem experienced and trustworthy to the viewers. 

Although Isabel does not use much logos in her presentation, she uses pathos throughout all of it.  The evidence is from her own personal experiences and contains a lot of bias.  Viewers can tell she truly believes in every word she is saying, and it's like some of her strength and confidence is even drawing forth some of the viewers' own emotions.  She relies on it to get her message across emotionally to really relate with the audience.  One way she does this is by making jokes throughout her talk.  It keeps things interesting and fun, maintaining the audience's attention.  Also, the part when she speaks of all the positive aspects she has gained from aging is very powerful.  I like it, because she makes it sound like the pros outweigh the cons, and makes the concept of aging less scary.  The way she holds herself makes her seem truthful, comfortable with herself, and relatable.  Her use of pathos creates a personal connection between Isabel and the audience, which makes her argument that much more inspiring/appealing.      

Personally, I found myself choosing this video because I think the concept of aging is really interesting.  Everyone experiences it differently.  I'm at this point when I'm about to graduate high school and go to college.  I just turned 18, making me an adult now.  It’s such a major point in life that it can bring on both pros and cons as well.  There’s the pro of being done with high school and finally getting to the point when we can start our futures, and what we might want to do as a career.  There’s also the fear that it brings, like the amount of responsibility it requires.  Unlike Isabelle, we are actually gaining independence, and to me it’s both scary and exciting.  I think her talk really can relate to what I’m experiencing at this point in my life, and I will always remember her main message of always living passionately.  She concluded her talk with her stating her willingness to always live passionately and asking the question, "Want to join me?"  My answer is Yes.